Week 3 Story: Modern Day Savior/ Tech Tip: Adding Music to Story
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Jesus, the son of God, has traveled far and wise performing miracles in order to bring as many as he can to faith. As 2020 slowly approaches, it remains clear that persuading followers is not as easy as the first time he came to earth; however, he has yet to grow weary despite the attempts of demons. Jesus and his twelve disciples have flown via Jet into New York City. Upon arrival, Jesus was met by a homeless man whom immediately ran towards him. The man was wearing rags, wreaked of alcohol, and smelt of a stench that words cannot convey. The man dropped to his knees, begging for mercy and claiming that demons were tormenting him. Jesus asked the man his name and the man responded saying "My name is -". The man froze, as if he had seen a ghost, and his eyes rolled back deeply into his head. Jesus sensed the presence of the demons and spoke to them calmly, stating "I demand you that possess this body to speak your name." A raspy and deep voice responded stating "Our name is Cohort and we are many, please do not force us to leave this land." Jesus responded saying, "Cohort, I demand you all to return to the bodies of the snakes, where you belong." Instantly, snakes from the sewers and darkest corners of the streets in New York immediately slithered into the roads, where they were all run over by passing cars. The man who knelt before Jesus praised him, but Jesus told him to merely spread the word of what miracle he had performed. While the mans efforts were plentiful, videos on social media became viral, displaying thousands of snakes flooding the streets of New York and being killed by cars. Word spread quickly on a nationwide scale, that Jesus had returned and was performing miracles. Later that day, Jesus came into downtown New York and was surrounded by many attempting to simply see the savior. While being bombarded with people, Jesus heard a whisper of a prayer near a pizza shop. He stopped with his disciples and approached a women in rags that appeared to be deathly sick. The woman was so sick, she could not stand to see her savior. Instead, she laid on a blanket and continued to pray. Jesus placed his hand on her shoulder and said, "Your faith is strong, thus you are healed." The women immediately regained color to her face and stood up to praise Jesus. Jesus began walking once again with his disciples and another man approached him. The man's name was "Gerald" and he was well-known to be the best doctor in New York. He told Jesus that his only daughter had grown very ill, and that without his help she would surely die. Jesus told Gerald to take him to his daughter. Jesus and Gerald were informed that his daughter had died, but Jesus wanted to see her. Jesus went into the hospital with Gerald and saw his lifeless daughter laying on her death bed. Jesus said, "My son, do not weep, for she is merely sleeping." Jesus placed his hand on her head and removed it. Immediately the girl rose and Gerald hugged his daughter and praised Jesus. Gerald ran outside and told the crowd of the miracle Jesus performed. The crowd cheered, and all began to sing in praise of Jesus.
Authors Note: The original story was Jesus The Healer from Mark 5 in the King James Bible. This story was originally very hard to read, especially in the version presented. I wanted to create a modernized version using the same plot and protagonist. I felt that this could convey the message of Jesus' healing in a more contemporary way. I used different characters for those other than Jesus. I really enjoyed recreating this, hope you all enjoy reading it!
Bibliography: Story Source: King James Bible (1611), Mark 5: Jesus The Healer
Hey Garrett, I like the take you took on this story; stories from the Bible, like Shakespeare, can be pretty hard to read, especially when you consider the language differences. This is a small suggestion, but in the future you might want to break the story up into smaller paragraphs; having a big block of text can make it hard to take everything in, since the eye tends to skip over stuff when there's not a break.
ReplyDeleteI definitely will do this ! Thanks for the advice
DeleteHey, Garrett!
ReplyDeleteThis is a great concept for a story -- taking a well-known tale and resetting it in a modern context makes it instantly more engaging and accessible to your audience. I thought it was humorous to imagine the stories that I've heard happen around NYC pizzerias and jets. Like Madison said, I think formatting it into paragraphs might help the readability, but I enjoyed it!
Hi Garrett,
ReplyDeleteI liked your story a lot. You did a really good job of translating the miracles into a modern day retelling. I also liked the way you used social media to demonstrate the word of mouth crowds for Jesus's following when he was doing the miracles. I think that splitting the story into paragraphs would really help with the reading of the story. Can't wait to see what you do the rest of the semester.
Hello, Garrett!
ReplyDeleteFirst off, I really like the feel of your writing as it reminds me of a news reporter narrating events. I really enjoyed reading about a modern messiah, a truly unique and fun take on Biblical stories about Jesus! You could go pretty far with your reporter-like style by adding things like "witnesses at the scene said..." or "an insider informed our news stations that...". One question I have is, what are your feelings about adding a bit more back story to how Jesus feels being in the modern world? Maybe you could give some more details regarding his disciples, such as how they felt in modern society or their views on the miracles Jesus performs. Maybe you could add a bit about how news outlets attempt to explain these miracles or how the public reacts in general to them? Over all, I really enjoyed what you did with this story and it is all the more impressive considering that your source material was the King James Version, which, as you point out, is really difficult to get through for most people! Good job!